holding it in

tears are forgiven, anger is forbidden, happiness is stolen

When a tear holds too much sadness

it has to be released

so out your eye it falls

it rolls right down your cheek

 

When a frown holds to much anger

You clutch your fist and make a face

you think the feeling never leaves

but then it goes away....

 

When a smile holds to much happiness

is it impossible to pout?

they say you can have to much of a good thing

but when you're too happy does it count?

 

 

Reviews

[Katie]

Plain and simple, in a nutshell - creative and I LOVE IT.

[EMMIE]

Uh!!!!! I'm sick and tired of people talking about format format format! Format my a*s! (Sorry) I don't care about form, style, blah blah blah this is awesome the way it is and if it comes from the heart why should it be in a specific form we write poetry because it gives us freedom, so that means you can write whatever you want to, however you want to write it. I think too many people spend too much time worrying about structure in a poem and not enough time on the meanings and the deep messages. Lol sorry, I had to get it off my chest. Very interesting poem and once again provoking thought. You are a very creative writer and I appreciate your unique style

[faint smile]

thank you so much! and its fine you read my mind i couldn't have said it any other way

[Melinda Weber]

I agree with Julia... but apart from that good work :) When we are feeling negative emotions, we tend to hold it in until we can't stand it anymore. Yet when we are happy, we release those feelings easily because it makes us feel good. So yes, a smile always counts and you can never have to much of a good thing :))

[Marie]

No, you can never be too happy.

[Julia Mancini]

I really like this poem. The only thing I have to say is about the format of it. Your pattern switched in the last stanza, you made a bi line rhyme, where as the other stanzas don't have it.