The Unexpected

The Unexpected

 

            “Tell me, please?” he whispered into my ear, as he slowly drew his fingers across my face, brushing my bangs out of my eyes.

            “Will you still love me?”

            “Forever and always, my love.” He kissed my forehead. I sighed and began my long tale.

            I took a life. I took out my revenge on someone not worthy. And I don’t feel any better than before I did. The only closure I have is that he won’t be able to hurt me or anyone else ever again.  

            When he came for me the second time, I was prepared for it. His twisted face smirked as he walked toward me. He shoved me into the wall and I instantly reacted. I snapped open my pocket knife with my thumb and stabbed it into his chest. He staggered back and collapsed onto the floor.

            Staring at me with wide terrified eyes, he dragged himself away from me. I smirked the way he had just moments before and pulled my knife from his bloody wound. Then I drew the blade in a line down his chest, opening layer after layer of soft flesh. Blood gushed everywhere coating me in its thick red color. The smells of death and copper were all around me.

            I peeled my way to his heart; beating frantically as it tried to pump blood through his open arteries. It was almost peaceful in my head as the panic spread around me.

            With a final whisper I stabbed the knife into the heart. I watched the beat slow and stop, and then stood up and walked away. I never once looked back at him. It was over.

 

            “Life is a gift that can be taken away from the unworthy.”

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Good story but it could use more details. Who was the guy? Her father, uncle, brother, suitor? And the guy she was telling the story to was ??? I am assuming someone important in her life, as she still wants him to love her. Good start!

[Xerclipse]

Well that was a pretty good story that you told. But it could be expanded a bit. The guy was very twisted like you described him. Pretty awesome and bloody.