First attempt.

A stream of (thoughtful) fantasy.

Darkness, velvet upon her eyes

Expectant

Focussed upon the invisible

Her breath a din in its softness

 

The twisted symmetry within her gentlest grasp

Meditative

Just her, no thoughts to invade

Overwhelming grace beneath her fingers

 

A breath, not hers

Resounding

Her gasp restrained

Staring into blackness

 

A movement, an imagined touch

Timeless

Blindly searching

Beauty crushed within her hand

 

Cavernous silence

Vigilant

Measured inhalation,

Shh, “Shhh!”, listen!

 

A bud of hunger flowering within her resolve

Warming

Perfect isolation

The waiting exquisite

 

Each testing movement checked

Vital

Every sense acute

A pyre of guilt and expectation

 

A bound freedom

Irresponsible

Abandonment offered

And yearned for

 

Time immeasurable

Pregnant

A momentary, searing contact

Ecstatic release

Author's Note

Hoping for advice on how I can improve. Thanks folks!

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Ach, the imagined touch! Yes, I am sure in this age of the online fantasist there are millions of us who strive in out imaginations to make that touch as real as possible. We focus on it for all we are worth. We despair when we think we can never have it. And yet the beauty of it is perhaps that we can't have it. And so it goes ... we think of it again and again. It disappoints and yet does not disappoint as we can always call it up again. Yep, guilt, freedom, yearning ... you have it all there. And the realease at the end is fitting. Feed the 'orse Harold!

[SLAlexander]

It's excellent. There's nothing that needs improving. Would like to see more of your work.

[BABSIE BEE]

You have captured a magic scene here. Very seductive and full of intensified longings... leading to new heights. Very well written I'd say !! No room for improvement. I like it very much. Thanks for sharing.
Babsie Bee xx

[Stacey Watts]

Very well written piece. I like the way it flows and the imagery. Excellent job

[Legion]

I'm not sure you can improve it. It is pretty damn good as it. Kudos.

[...MysteryGirl...]

Very well written..
I like it

[Butterflymom]

I found this to be quite beautiful, original, and fresh! I can't think of any idea's that would make it any better than it already is! WELL DONE!