Gone- A death

If you ever had a close relative die, anyone you cared for, their spirits are with you and they will survive. You think about them every day but do not let the tide of grief and sadness corrupt you.

They're gone from me forever. I will never hear them again, 

nor laughing nor crying. My sorrow is a wave and I dread trying to quench it.

 How can I get over this darkness? I try to fight but every time I do a single thing it reminds me of what I've lost.

 I am swallowed by the wave for this time your caring hands and warm eyes cannot find me and pull me out. 

I try to stand and suddenly find you glowing right by my side. 

I'm here you say. I am always with you. 

And finally I can believe it. Not once I had trusted those words

when they were spoken to me by the living.

And now I am free of the wave, and can let go.

I know I'll find you if need be. 

I know and that's enough for me.

Author's Note

I would really want you to say how you think I can improve on my writing. Also what do you think about the last line? Do you think I should have written just I know or the whole sentence? Thanks guys!

Reviews

[Alucard6336]

I think this is awesome.

Do you think I'm commenting on this because I do not have a personal interest in what you wrote.

I write Pagan Paranormal Romance and Lovecraftian Horror, so you know.

Now do you want mere advice? My advice on writing is to write from the heart, and never, ever, give up. Write constantly and consistently.

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