Endless Haze

An endless haze,

a constant blur

of life rushing past me

 

It's going too fast

and I can't keep up.

Life shouldn't be this hard to grasp

 

But wait

 

I'm the one who's moving.

The world is waiting

for me to slow down

and take hold of life.

Reviews

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Truly elegant and yet so true! How often do we zip through life and complain that we can't keep up?! The ending was magnificent.

[Laura E. Aranda]

NICE ending touch
Very eloquent, no?
I found this in Yos' library and was curious....I really like this one alot.
Cheers,lea

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

I am glad I found you, you touch the simple hings that we all feel ... thank you so much for your writting Yossi

[Randall Richard]

good composition, good sentiment, excellent conclusion. not bad at all

[Kevin Connolly]

Excellent, Verina. I really believed life was rushing past you, but then...

"But wait." (Set apart, as this line is, those two words really stand out.)

The world is standing still, you're moving too fast for it! Great stuff, Verina, I love your up-and-at-'em attitude.

[Kira Love]

Great poem, Verina, but you left me wanting more!! Maybe a tad more description of the endless haze... you know, the rush you feel, or the confusion... This is a great write, but there is so much more you can do with it!