Little Girl Alive

lush, Green blades push themselves heavenward

As spring finds it's way to the forest.

A little girl makes her way forward

With a bright feeling in her chest.

 

She's happier than ever today.

The world makes her feel that she can do anything.

A breeze lifts her brown hair as she makes her way.

And the forest seems to listen as she sings.

 

I'm finding my way in this difficult place,

But it's not all struggle and strife.

I'll wipe all tears from my face.

I'm finished feeling all grief.

I know problems will meet me in this race

But soon I'll move on with my life.

Author's Note

This is my very first sonnet, so I'd appreciate all the feedback I can get.

Reviews

[Clyde du Coeur]

Brilliant work - sonnets appear so effortless but actually are very difficult to write. I love what you've done with this Ver, from the observer in the first stanza, then the 3rd person and lastly the first. I like that in poetry as it gives the reader a view from all perspectives. I can't think of anything wrong with this sonnet, do keep up the good work!!

[Kenna]

I like the transition from first person, to third, then back again, as well. Your poem reads easily, and it paints a very pretty picture. Great job!

[Wildecat]

Nice content and themes, I too enjoyed this sonnet.

[Wulfstan Crumble]

Thats a nice sonnet. I like its contents and themes. Though, the only technical detail i would query, if i may, is that a sonnet tends to end with a rhyming couplet. Regardless of that it was very uplifting.