the night ( よる )

just another poem i hope you like it

 As the night falls

  My heart begins to race

   For it knows and enjoys the solace

    Within this darkness shines the brightest stars 

     For they are smothered in the light

Author's Note

just something i wrote at 12 42 in the morning

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Again, short, sweet and effective. Once again, your imagery sparks my mind to picture many things. It doesn't flow the most beautifully but nonetheless it's still extremely enjoyable!

I also like that you told us the time when you wrote it. Definitely brings the imagery to reality. Not to mention, I believe that some of the best things people can write is when they aren't entirely in their firm mind frame... as in tired and not really thinking everything "logically" so things flow more freely. Or you get a jumbled mess of nonsense.... which still is art! Go postmodernism! (joking... sort of haha).

Anyway, great poem!

Love this~!!! The last two lines are amazing - to realize and put into words how the sun hides the glory of the stars during the day makes me think of how those around us sometimes hide our beauty without realizing it -- beautiful writing.

[alec merdin]

thank you Lee

[Lee*]

Took a while for this to percolate through my brain but the deeper meaning came through my dull brain eventually. A nice contrast of light and dark and the effect of day on the beauty of the stars. Nice!