the flight (とり)

a little poem i did awhile ago

  fly fast 

   fly high

    fly with claws grasped

     and face the spiral of life and death

Author's Note

just a little poem i came up one day while rounding off to a friend

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Very nice, short but sweet and effective ^.^ I love the layout as well, definitely a good choice for this poem. The imagery is wonderfully vivid and in my mind I first see it as a hawk or an eagle that eventually transforms into a human who is also going through the same cycle as the bird. But that's just what I see in my own mind. Great job! ^.^

[Lee*]

Love the rhythm of the words here. Very sharp!

[alec merdin]

thanks Joseph thats what i was going for

[Joe]

This is a really neat poem. the words are great, as well as the imagery. I like the repetition of the word "fly". The shortness of the poem is like an iceberg, not much on the surface, but beneath there is a whole lot more. Great job! Keep it up!