Congratulations on the birth of your new grandson Alan! Your beautiful poem is panoramic, ecstatic, poignant and contemplative. The photo is precious. Your eloquent, dramatic words convey so skillfilly the hesitancy- the holding of breath- the fragility of the moment...the hopes, the fears, the history, the love above all. Yes, “let the babe sleep” and may God bless him always.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Sorry about these belated thanks for reading this. I was just saying to my son that for his son its .. read moreSorry about these belated thanks for reading this. I was just saying to my son that for his son its as if he's spent his life in the dark of the deep ocean and entered another realm. What a shock!
Regards. Alan
hi Alan thankyou for review its much appreciated im new on so havnt done much, this is a great write of yours it was a sweet tale and personal which i love a lovely picture, i will be reading some more,,,, Tracey
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
That's very kind of you Tracey. We are enjoying our grandson so much.
All the best Alan
...for the moment... this will be the first of a hundred poems for Leo and maybe his own string of bedtime stories
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6 Years Ago
Thanks for reading this poem Cherrie. The birth of a first grandchild is a great moment. It takes yo.. read moreThanks for reading this poem Cherrie. The birth of a first grandchild is a great moment. It takes you back to your own children and forward to the possibilities of the future.
Regards,
Alan
6 Years Ago
It does it is the fountain of youth and congratulations
how i love poems about babies, their innocence says it all. nice piece of writing
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6 Years Ago
Thanks sette. Newborn babies are lovely and thankfully most grow into decent adults.
Cheers.<.. read moreThanks sette. Newborn babies are lovely and thankfully most grow into decent adults.
Cheers.
Alan
I'm amazed at how you covered so many bases with your deliciously sweet poem! First, my congrats, gramps, on being mesmerized by this tiny wonder! You definitely got that across (I can almost see your eyes misting up a bit). Love your highly original descriptions of all the "baby" stuff we go ga-ga over *smile* But even more intriguing was your stanza explaining how various physical attributes connect all the related people who are going ga-ga as they each see some part of themselves! I also love the way you let this sweet lullaby bump up against some of this world's harshnesses, if only to emphasize your refrain of sleepytime innocence that should remain uninterrupted! Just beautiful! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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6 Years Ago
Belated thanks Margie. It seems like moments since our own kids were babies. Its soon over!
H.. read moreBelated thanks Margie. It seems like moments since our own kids were babies. Its soon over!
Hope you are well.
Alan
Congratulations on the birth of your new grandson Alan! Your beautiful poem is panoramic, ecstatic, poignant and contemplative. The photo is precious. Your eloquent, dramatic words convey so skillfilly the hesitancy- the holding of breath- the fragility of the moment...the hopes, the fears, the history, the love above all. Yes, “let the babe sleep” and may God bless him always.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Sorry about these belated thanks for reading this. I was just saying to my son that for his son its .. read moreSorry about these belated thanks for reading this. I was just saying to my son that for his son its as if he's spent his life in the dark of the deep ocean and entered another realm. What a shock!
Regards. Alan
Beautifully captured memory that will never leave you. Billions before and after will feel this, yet every time is truly unique. So get your head round that if you can :)
Congratulations Grampa.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Sorry for not replying lorry. Thanks for reading. Your comments are spot on.
Cheers.
A.. read moreSorry for not replying lorry. Thanks for reading. Your comments are spot on.
Cheers.
Alan
CONGRATS !!
It's such a special tender time of life
I have a great-grandson
all my grandchildren (5) are girls.!
Enjoy !!! .........♥
Jazzy
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thanks Jazzy. Yes it is a wonderful new phase of life.
All the best to you and your clan!read moreThanks Jazzy. Yes it is a wonderful new phase of life.
All the best to you and your clan!
Alan
6 Years Ago
Thank you... and...You are welcome.........:)......
Your tender feelings and thoughts for this child are well-described. May the two of you be the best of friends.
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6 Years Ago
Thanks Samuel. I'm losing track with the WC hanging up the closed sign every five minutes! Life cycl.. read moreThanks Samuel. I'm losing track with the WC hanging up the closed sign every five minutes! Life cycles on but it seems a big deal when its your own offspring.
All the best to you!
Alan
this made me quite emotional, such a sweet and thoughtful poem. beautifully written.
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6 Years Ago
Thanks for your kind words.. I feel the same. When your writing is personal your writing seems close.. read moreThanks for your kind words.. I feel the same. When your writing is personal your writing seems closer to your heart.
Regards, alan
Married with three kids, I retired early from teaching physics but have always enjoyed mountains. In my forties I experienced a manic episode which kick-started a creative urge. I've written a novel .. more..