I feel that you put all the thoughts I could not pin down into words in this poem. This is exactly how I feel, people tend to put themselves on a pedestal, not realizing that we share the same type of flesh, veins, blood as billions of others, we are fragments of a machine we don't understand.
Thanks for your kind review. Yes I think we are flickering shadows, not really knowing ourselves.read moreThanks for your kind review. Yes I think we are flickering shadows, not really knowing ourselves.
Regards,
Alan
7 Years Ago
Sorry, not sure where that last bit came from!
What i did type was, Regards, Alan
I really like this. It has great form - and a great message.
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7 Years Ago
Thanks adam for reading this and your comments. It was strange how this poem seemed to appear out of.. read moreThanks adam for reading this and your comments. It was strange how this poem seemed to appear out of nowhere.
Cheers,
Alan
I can just say pure existentialism in pure form. Words are simply and straight. And make reader think about her or his own life.
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7 Years Ago
Thanks, I have to keep it simple because I can't do big words and fancy metaphor - and I can't under.. read moreThanks, I have to keep it simple because I can't do big words and fancy metaphor - and I can't understand them.
Regards,
Alan
I believe life is like love there is no meaning. IT just IS. The purpose of life is what you decide it to be for your own just my opinion. This was simple but very insightful.thank u
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7 Years Ago
Thanks for reading and your very profound comments. I agree completely with you - our life is only w.. read moreThanks for reading and your very profound comments. I agree completely with you - our life is only what we can make of it. There is no guiding hand or fate in the background.
Regards,
Alan
Thanks sayantika. This poem just came into my head! You'll see that most of my writing is short stor.. read moreThanks sayantika. This poem just came into my head! You'll see that most of my writing is short stories but I think they are worth a read. There is often a surprising twist. By the way, your photos makes you a very young looking 81.
Regards,
Alan
7 Years Ago
I'm not 81 BTW... It's just a story.... And thanks for becoming my friend
So true and fitting for these troubled times we find ourselves in. A very thought provoking and memorable write.
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7 Years Ago
Thanks dara. Life does seem a bit of a mystery at times but we just have to get on with it.
.. read moreThanks dara. Life does seem a bit of a mystery at times but we just have to get on with it.
Regards
Alan
Top marks, Alan. A profound message. The two most important words? 'we are' A good write.
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7 Years Ago
Thanks Ted. These thoughts must have been forming unconsciously because the poem seemed to write it.. read moreThanks Ted. These thoughts must have been forming unconsciously because the poem seemed to write itself.
Regards,
Alan
I feel that you put all the thoughts I could not pin down into words in this poem. This is exactly how I feel, people tend to put themselves on a pedestal, not realizing that we share the same type of flesh, veins, blood as billions of others, we are fragments of a machine we don't understand.
Thanks for your kind review. Yes I think we are flickering shadows, not really knowing ourselves.read moreThanks for your kind review. Yes I think we are flickering shadows, not really knowing ourselves.
Regards,
Alan
7 Years Ago
Sorry, not sure where that last bit came from!
What i did type was, Regards, Alan
This is so beautiful, I read it a few times to absorb its beauty. Stunning flow Alan and effortless, elegant and tenderly expressed, eternal, in some ways :)
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7 Years Ago
Thanks Poppy. Sometimes writing just seems to flow. It is a mystery!
Regards,
Alan
A flowing piece that makes one think of ones own mortality and the inconsequential nature of our footprint upon being.
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7 Years Ago
Thanks John. Poems are not easy for me but this one just seemed to write itself after I had the firs.. read moreThanks John. Poems are not easy for me but this one just seemed to write itself after I had the first line. I am always fascinated to know how people can write such brilliant poems. I guess there is not one answer.
Regards,
Alan
Married with three kids, I retired early from teaching physics but have always enjoyed mountains. In my forties I experienced a manic episode which kick-started a creative urge. I've written a novel .. more..