we were not designed that way

the first we knew
it would not cease
was on day five

and at waist deep
in the main street

we bit our lips
against the fray

and hoped for it
to dissipate

our souls distraught
inside the doom

at end of day
we could not pray

for at the time
we were resigned

and knew full well
that we were not

designed that way

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the most itriguing aspect of this poem is in its composition~ I read it as a rhythmic chant~my brain processed it in double beat rhymes though the the double beat is purely conceptual on my personal part~ and that is the magik of this~ wether you did it subconsciously or consciously doesn't matter~ it is a poem that is processed on a higher sideways level~ bravo!

[LJW]

Unique and memorable

[Wildfleour]

I really have missed your poetry!

[Ed Hart]

i wondered if you were living in the flood area...this thing we call our life depends first on environment, as we are reminded every once in a while...you write clean and direct and tell the truth...the best are re-designed that way

[Emily B]

these may be the most moving words I've read in quite a while