you murder me

i am
always knocked
so down
and out for count
cold
to firmament
dead
six billion
useless doornails
worth
of crucified
lies
can't murder me
more
than
you

Reviews

[Ed Hart]

in the broad reaches of eternity (whatever that means) each of us has this tiny flash of light we call our lives, which we pour into the living moment...if our personal history truncates and cripples us, then our tiny flash is dim and self absorbed...if we stand aside the injuries and assaults, and release them (it's a slow process, i know), then our lives belong to us, and we are free beyond measure...

[Papaya]

For someone to hold that kind of power...
Love can certainly make or break.
Enjoyed this one Alan.

[gayleadele]

Throughout my 42 years, my love life is your first four lines...but this is so much more. Very well structured and easy to read. Well done.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are my new sensation...your delivery is crisp and concise, and has the right amount of punch to move me!

[alan peter kelly]

Oh how i adore the intelligent mind.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...its such a terrible thing to waste!

[alan peter kelly]

I've pretty much just come back in a most real sense Kelly and I'm just now observing your kind and very sweet phrases which, as you may imagine, have made my day! Thank you for recognising my art and mind. I certainly hope you are still at least a relative regular as I'd enjoy chatting with you...I've applied for an ad on your profile and hope we can communicate soon :)