Whale Rock Reservoir

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Clear seaside panoramic view     

near Whale Rock water’s deepest hue

young laughter drifts along the breeze

impassioned plea to no appease  

 

how long for us did time stand still

one summer’s sunset on that hill

my locks around you like a veil

of lapis gaze and hearts assail

 

but amber blush too soon unfold

for hearts not free to have and hold

as twilight splendor kissed the day

the night held on ---but couldn’t stay

 

Reviews

[Christi Moon]

will check into the spacing Luke-- on my screen the picture is not affecting the placement of the poem. Will address the repetition of 'hearts' right away. thanks for catching that.

[L]

Love your unerring iambic tetrameter. Hey I'm seeing the first couple of lines pushed out by the pic again (?). Lovely piece, even if you do use teh word 'hearts' twice (L8 & L10 :)

[Julie Watkins]

My locks around you like a veil
Of lapis gaze and hearts assail

Absolutely adore these two lines. Such a romantic piece Christi with a bitter sweet ending.