Gather Me

If pain were to have a colour,

Will colour it grey..

Unsure, obscure and yet turbulent

The cold touch , the distant feel and the same old lone me

The wet pillow and the clean bed

tells me you were once there

The grey spreads again in  my mind and soul

Think should let it be there forever

Reviews

[DRAGO]

nice, is it a coincidence that you said it spreads in your mind, which is made by your brain and your brain is grey, and more grey matter(to a certain point) makes you smarter?

[Alka]

To me it was the gloom which spread...and the hurt makes me wary of my actions

[DRAGO]

Yes, I see...

[Chase Weik]

I could really feel all of the meaning in this piece. It's very strong and invokes a lot of thought, which is what most people try to do if they are writing poetry. I think the wording might be off in the phrases "will colour it grey" or "think should let it be there forever", but that might be because I just don't get what you meant or maybe you did it for artistic purpose. I still understood the message you were trying to convey, though. Great job! Welcome to the site!

[Alka]

Hey chaise...thanks for the warm welcome...
The intend was to give pain a colour....red is outdone...and didn't want to give such bright colour to the feeling...wanted a more paler true to life colour 😊

[Chase Weik]

Thank you for clarifying! Makes it that much better to read! Thank you Alka!

[Alka]

Thanks so much....really appreciate

[DRAGO]

do you see words with colors, because I kindof do

[Alka]

At times I do

[DRAGO]

cool__________