Is this fair

Looking at life through the perspective of a homeless person

I'm laying here on the hard cold ground

Trying to sleep while this harsh wind breaks me down

Thinking this is not supposed to be

 

Feeling like the world has forgotten me

Feeling like I'm invisible to all the passers

Feeling like I don't count

 

I stare into the dark

Looking up past the sky

Praying for a better day

 

I try to race to the front of line

Hoping for a place to stay through the night

A soft bed and a warm blanket

 

I'm back laying here on the hard cold ground

Trying to sleep while this harsh wind breaks me down

Thinking this is not supposed to be

 

This world is a dark lonely place

Where the weak get weaker

And the strong get stronger

 

Can you please spare some change sir

Can you please spare some change m'am

Reviews

[Kiri Nells]

Spot on to society today. It is often that if you are wealthy, your wealth growns and that if you are poorer, you're lost in poverty forever. Very well written, great job!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

powerful~poignant statement oh how society devalues those who do not measure up to its unrealistic expectations~

[Sarah]

This was amazing! Great job!

[Blossom]

this is absolutely heartbreaking!!!! I love how you the the talent to put yourself into the perspective of you writing. it makes it seem all the more real.

[r]

Wow, this is sad, and you did a spectacular job on it. I especially love the "feeling like the world has forgotten me" until "praying for a better day". My two favorite stanzas. Love it. [♥][♥] Only thing i have to criticize [haha] is in the last line, it should be "ma'am" That's how you spell it. xD Other than that, this poem is PERFECT.

[♥]~Cheezit~[♥]

[Wicahpi]

Sad.
In this society, there should
be none of this.

[Immortal1967]

i liked this...great job on it

[deeps]

I like this, kind of sad really...but your emotions did well expressing how you felt. Very well written.

[Sports Girl]

Thats really good. Stinks that you had to write it twice. But it still came out good.