Your Game

Your Game

A Poem by kira mommy

I hurt inside
My tears of sorrow
How did you do this to me
I want answers
No more games
Just you and me
I want to know
Did i mean so little 
Was it all for nothing 
What a game
Now it's over
No more 
I'm sick of the game
This game of yours
It's over I'm done
You meant so much to me 
But now I know
I meant so little

© 2010 kira mommy


Author's Note

kira mommy
grammar and punctuation dont count

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A good piece, though I do think some grammar and punctuation wouldn't do any harm. Ignore that other d****e, this is a good piece. If he's not into this sort of poetry, he shouldn't be reading it. Simple as. Thanks for sharing.
[M]

Posted 14 Years Ago


Though I do have a disclaimer that I don't appreciate free form poetry, this poem's terribly emotionless. It's short, and seems like you put absolutely no effort into it. The "woe is me" tone of it is annoying to read, and it's very bland, boring, and there is little to no thought to word choice. The eloquence of poetry was not captured, and I think you should work on that the hardest.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on July 6, 2010
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kira mommy
kira mommy

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no much to say like wolves and all creatures im wiccan got a baby on the way and my favorite hobbies are to read and write more..

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