THAT DAY I WAS ALONE

THAT DAY I WAS ALONE

                            That day i was alone,

Nobody cared for me,nothing left for me,

And I was like ignored,

That day i was alone...

My heart throbbed when I saw a shadow,

But it was just a fake one,

I was lonely,I was afraid,

But nobody thought of giving my heart a first aid,

And this lead me to drone,

That day i was alone...

Then again i saw someone coming towards me,

She switched on the lamp,and wept off my tears, she was someone,my dear one, No one other,but my MOTHER....

Reviews

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Aww this is so beautiful!! Thank you so much Akshita for sharing this lovely piece :)

[Angel]

As long as Mom is around, we cannot be along. God bless her.
Love her, appreciate her, let her know how important she is to you.
Cuz she won't be there forever...

[Rahul]

This write's painful, lovable, heartfelt and impactful indeed. I've no words to write here thereby i could give ya review but i wanna say "ADORABLE AND HEART BREAKABLE...
i liked here you this phrase much
My heart throbbed when I saw a shadow,
But it was just a fake one,
I was lonely,I was afraid,
But nobody thought of giving my heart a first aid...nicely penned. and real write there;s no fiction addition...
you really got some talent of writing. keep writing and keep writing. I'd even love to read your more nice stuffs.
now it's your right to get this rating 500/100.
you deserved and one more thing, "youse this write's damn emotional", you were in pain when you jotted this i can feel your pain, i can see your emotional by this piece.

[Eagle Cruagh]

Being alone is a negative. There is probably no
worse pain. We have no place to turn, life is
emptyp------then enter MOTHER, the most positive
and loving force known to mankind.
Not only does Mother make our lives complete, but
in this case she made your poem. The most positive
force on earth, MOTHER.

Thank you,
----- Eagle Cruagh

[Akshat♥]

Mom is everything to us...she never wants anything from you..
still want to give you everything she can !!
lovely poem..so emotional..specially on mothers day..
Happy mothers day:)
Keep wriitng!!

[Pradeep Nair]

being ignored is the greatest pain.... slowly lead to death.
the shadows, first aid....> you have used a lot of cliches here... powerful ones..

Really enjoyed the poem...

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Aww..lovely..Mum's the bestest...:-)

[Stanley Wilson]

beautifully written and expressive

[Sakshi]

such an amazing thought, narrated in a flawless manner.
amazing use of words!
keep it up :)

[Jetta Zippora]

So beautiful and emotional. :) Very touching and vivid, friend.