Woes of Women

It depicts the life and ordeals of women especially indian women,because of some lascivious men

Everywhere lullabies hum,

Here i come!

With dad's love & care of mum,

Here i come!

Like the lighting of house i shine,

They worship me as if i were divine.

Dad's shoulders were the best seat,

Holding his fingers i stood on my feet.

Then they took me all the way to school,

Down my cheeks the tears rolled.

They taught me the values & taught me the rules,

I got my first friends,some shy some droll.

As i grew,childhood dispersed,

And so did the innocence.

Mom said being a girl is a curse,

As the men have no benevolence.

"The perverts will leer you my child"she said

"Strong you are,so no need to dread".

Don't grow peevish when dad is over-protective,

Afterall for him you are a sweet little princess.

Now as i step out,my battle begins,

With the devils disguised as men.

The day ends and i pat myself again,

I survived one more day being a woman.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

I loved the second verse so much. It was so beautifully written. It showed such strong bond between the girl and her father. Beautifl piece.

Mark.

[Akansha]

Thank you so much! :)

[Starkindler33]

I really agree and love this message, beautiful piece!

[Akansha]

Thanks! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Being a woman is indeed hard for most of us.. upholding morals yet getting blamed even though they are right 'cause its a male-oriented society in the East.. I totally agree with the message delivered here. Great piece..

[Akansha]

Thank you so much! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome ☺

[Nitin]

The words are indeed beautifully written and composed to get this piece of art complete in a flawless manner. But the message that it carries is arguable as in my view it's not only the women who gets exploited, even women in high positions exploit men

[Akansha]

Yes I completely agree with you but this piece particularly talks about the evils women have to suffer in India!

[Akansha]

Thank you for reading! :)

[Nitin]

Yeah, I think even I should agree to that in our country the life for a woman is not easy, but its changing and that is what is important. isn't it?

[Leif+Henry]

you certainly capture the spirit of a woman.

[Akansha]

Thank you! :)

[Avinash]

Every time a weak will start getting strength and confidence, it will receive violent opposition from established power order namely men. But blaming men will not take women anywhere, they have to become stronger and braver and stop depending on men which ultimately leads to exploitation, be it father, brother, boyfriend, spouse only then they will be able to earn respect from others as well as the self.
I liked the way you have put your thoughts but playing victim is not the answer, finding solutions is.

[Sourav]

Quite understandable. It's a shame to agree with this poem but truth is bitter and ashamed of the present situation. Long way to go... may be someday everything will be fine. Take care.... have fun and keep writing... cheers! :)

[Akansha]

yeah I too hope that everything will be fine someday.Thanks for reading :)

[Roger Turgeon]

Ouch...once I got past being a man and appreciated where this was coming from culturally I applaud your braveness and readiness to face the challenges you know are in front of you. Good job mum and dad.

[CountNicholasAlti]

There's truth to this and I feel great sympathy to women who have had to find this out, that there is really no such thing as the knightly prince charming. I enjoy the first and last stanzas the most, as their pacing and flow are very well done, but some in the middle seems a bit jumbled and forced. If you are going for structure with in stanzas, it is important to make each one flow perfectly. Also, it should be "strong you are" instead of "strong you're." That being said, I believe a stern edit can drive this poem to be an important piece in regards to feminine strength.

[Akansha]

Thanks.From now on,i'll surely keep these things in mind.

[New Theory]

Really an awesome emotional piece. Very well written.

[Akansha]

Thanks a lot!!!

[New Theory]

You are welcome :).

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