Chained to the Void

My words - your interpretation..... My first ever poem (since infant school!)

You were designed by logic

I was created by emotion

Your joy is numbers, mine is words

Your world is black and white

Mine a pallet of possibilities

You are active and gregarious

I was relaxed and centred

 

Opposites attract and so we did

North and South slam together, hard to break

I could not stay away from your burning candle, consumed, aglow

Love is blind, intertwined, all joined, ecstasy, two become one and yet more

You made me whole, you helped me grow

You eased my ache

 

But that was then, another time, same place

Harmony dissolved and out of synch

And now I am worthless, oft ignored, no value, just a scoreboard

My heart still chained to an empty void

All is missing, I cannot break the link

Reviews

[Enchanted-Raven]

How often we become too complacent in our relationships as time goes on...you described it perfectly, well penned :) x

[Cyndi's Meanderings]

Before I met my soulmate, this was how I felt, worthless, ignored, no value...love erases the hurt, aches and pains. Love the depth of this poem.

[Zenovia]

My heart still chained to an empty void
All is missing, I cannot break the link

These line says it all....loved your work

[Tina H.W.]

I really liked this. The pace is great! Slowly heating up towards the second verse, then hot in the second and cooled nicely. My heart felt a little sad reading the third verse. But I love the emotional rollercoaster you took me on throughout.
Truly wonderful piece :)

[aj milton]

Thanks for your comments. Yes it is a bit emotional. But cathartic to get it off my chest.

[Tina H.W.]

You are welcome :)

[neurostar burns]

Using dialectics or even dialectial reasoning or passing off as rhetoric in this one. Nevertheless, it shows some acumen. Good!

[TeeJae {TJ} Hart]

Love this piece as others have said awesome job being your first.

"You made me whole, you helped me grow You eased my ache But that was then, another time, same place
Harmony dissolved and out of synch
And now I am worthless, oft ignored, no value, just a scoreboar My heart still chained to an empty void All is missing, I cannot break the link"

These words you could have taken from my heart. They resound from within so much in my life right now. 16yrs with one person to now no longer be in sync and seeing him love another whilst i search for a way out of the void.

Keep up the great writing

[aj milton]

Thanks for your comments. Your own poems touched me too. I hope you find your way back to the light also.

[TeeJae {TJ} Hart]

Thankyou. I am slowly :-)

[Beautiful Intentions]

For being your first poem ever written I am exceedingly impressed. What an amazing delivery here. As I had felt every single word as if I could have penned them myself. Terrified by the end with the prospects of being "chained to an empty void" as I personally know this unbreakable link shared between two joined souls. Opposites in perfect balance of the other. How they have a hand in every flourishing moment, in the betterment of ourselves to the point that it seems as if endless roots have become intertwined and impossible to part. So afraid of this life... That half-life... Just an utterly thought provoking piece that tugged at my every fragile heart string.

[aj milton]

Thanks for your words. 'Half-life' is a really apt summation. And writing seems to provide an escape from the void. The stars are still beautiful.

[Beautiful Intentions]

Goodness... Going to make me cry. Want so much to ask you how long it's been since you've been without them... And yes... They are still so beautiful.

[aj milton]

Thanks for your kind words. Yes I'm in the void, but it isn't the first time, although I hope it will be the last! And I can see the light and it won't last forever. Also when I read some of the other emotions that can be found in writing here, I will take the pain of lost love any day over bad things that some people have to deal with,

[Beautiful Intentions]

This is so true. In a way just count our blessings! Feel for so many others who suffer... Who make my own problems seem so small that at times I wish I could embrace the world in warmth. I see the light too. Within and all around.

[mercy party]

i really liked the word scoreboard. at times it's like in love we just are keeping score as the clock is running out. good poem.

[James]

Really? This is your first? Very nice. I liked the way you summed up your feelings in the end. Great job.

[aj milton]

Thanks for the comments. yes really the only poem I have written since childhood. I may do some more one day but for now I'm addicted, obsessed and consumed by my desire to write prose.

[James]

Write away, you're good at it.