Chained to the Void

My words - your interpretation..... My first ever poem (since infant school!)

You were designed by logic

I was created by emotion

Your joy is numbers, mine is words

Your world is black and white

Mine a pallet of possibilities

You are active and gregarious

I was relaxed and centred

 

Opposites attract and so we did

North and South slam together, hard to break

I could not stay away from your burning candle, consumed, aglow

Love is blind, intertwined, all joined, ecstasy, two become one and yet more

You made me whole, you helped me grow

You eased my ache

 

But that was then, another time, same place

Harmony dissolved and out of synch

And now I am worthless, oft ignored, no value, just a scoreboard

My heart still chained to an empty void

All is missing, I cannot break the link

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Loved the middle bit great work

[aj milton]

Thanks. Those were those perfect times when love and passion conquers all

[Velia J. Matthews]

Beautifully written! You have a very unique way with words!

[aj milton]

Velia, thanks. This one was fueled by raw emotion.

[Coyote Poetry]

Opposite do attract. Always tempting to test unknown territory.
"My heart still chained to an empty void
All is missing, I cannot break the link"
Sometime we want what we cannot have. I do understand the above lines. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[aj milton]

Thanks, for a non-poet I'm amazed by, and appreciative of everybody's positive comments. I'm almost tempted to write another poem.

Oh no... please help me return to the dark side of dubious prose where I belong

[Coyote Poetry]

You are doing well and you are welcome.

[Zoya]

Ah, true, I believe...opposites attract. How you started from the very beginning of the love story, ending on a sad note...when something or the other goes out of control...and then, there is loss...hearts break. Very well written!

[aj milton]

Thank you.

[Zoya]

No problem

[pia]

Ive always been someone who firmly believes that opposites attract. I have real life examples right infront of me.
I believe people are like puzzles. No two ppl are similar. But. Two can perfectly fit into each other. I am an extrovert...i love making friends acting gooffyy and carefree. Im always attracted to someone the opposite of that. Even in terms of making a best friend !!! Two people somewhat the opposite always balance the other one out. Thats what brings excitement.
I loved this poem. Because. Yes sometimes extreme polar opposites can lead to problems. And the flow of emotions changing here was nicely put. Good job !!

[aj milton]

Thank you, appreciated

[Maria]

Wow, this has a tempo to it, full of excitement, yet yearning, happiness and sadness, the loss of something so valuable, that you cannot fathom being as you are in this time and space. Well done, I truly was captivated from the start.

[aj milton]

Thank you. Your comment is very perceptive. Sometimes our love can feel as big as the universe or as empty as space.

[Maria]

Thank you and you are welcomed.

[Rhia Barton]

I'm a sucker for opposites attract themes in poetry and you've really nailed this! I love the imagery you bring and the jumbled up rhythm feels like their world is in disrepair. Lovely poem!

[aj milton]

Thanks, glad you liked it.

[rowan.taylorrr]

i felt all of the emotion in this piece. i love the comparisons you make

[aj milton]

Thanks! yes this one did come from the heart

[Poetic License]

I felt every single word of this. It is a rare thing to find the young to our yang, and to lose it is the greatest grief. Your poem is heart wrenching. Your words are a sad melody echoing softly. Superior writing, and an emotional sledgehammer.

[aj milton]

Thanks for your comments - appreciated

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Memory is a ghost, a long shadow that follows wherever we roam. It haunts us and will not let us go. Beautiful!

[aj milton]

Thanks! with luck bright light drives away the shadow