Chained to the Void

My words - your interpretation..... My first ever poem (since infant school!)

You were designed by logic

I was created by emotion

Your joy is numbers, mine is words

Your world is black and white

Mine a pallet of possibilities

You are active and gregarious

I was relaxed and centred

 

Opposites attract and so we did

North and South slam together, hard to break

I could not stay away from your burning candle, consumed, aglow

Love is blind, intertwined, all joined, ecstasy, two become one and yet more

You made me whole, you helped me grow

You eased my ache

 

But that was then, another time, same place

Harmony dissolved and out of synch

And now I am worthless, oft ignored, no value, just a scoreboard

My heart still chained to an empty void

All is missing, I cannot break the link

Reviews

[grimfukle]

Relic's comment nailed it exactly.

[Relic]

I like the fact that you choose your words carefully and eliminate fillers. You depict a speaker who operates on emotion and yet can't affix that same character trait in someone who functions on reason and deduction.

Opposites do attract, but in terms of the heart, does not always satisfy the romantic players involved.

A fine poem.

[poetgurl]

kinda of a powerful write and intriguing. enjoyed

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed different values can compliment a relationship or not as the case may be. I guess it is how jealously one guards those values and whether or not one is willing and able to make concessions to difference rather than mirroring self in a false testament to safety and harmony? A poem to think to.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

aj milton,
This poem is a testament to the truth of the saying: "Opposites attract." She, a person, "active and gregarious," of "black and white" and "her joy in numbers."
You, "created by emotions," and a "pallet of possibilities," and "words," "relaxed and centered."
I see the lovly influence of this person: "you made me whole, you helped me grow
you eased my ache."
Life does continue on and hopefully the human heart and soul, in time find meaning and lessons learned. Letting go is a matter of steps forward and it is difficult but oh so necessary.
Please know that you will and are growing and becoming everyday as I hope your now gone loved one is as well.
Blessings,
Kathy

[aj milton]

Thanks for your comments

[Ardra]

My heart still chained to an empty void
All is missing, I cannot break the link

it has a nice flow :) your poem is not as sizzling as your stories lol .. but this is more relatable..

[aj milton]

Thanks! writing gives me catharsis two different ways. The stories are escapism and the poems are personal.

[Ardra]

true :) i so agree with that...
poems i too feel are very personal..

[Neville]

That is just the way it is sometimes I am afraid. I am also truly glad to have stumbled upon these words of yours aj milton there is something a little special here....

[Brittany Zedalis]

I loved this. It has a wonderful flow, and carried me along. By the end I could feel the sadness of that last stanza. Nicely done.

~Luna

[aj milton]

Thank you !

[apennylate]

Just a scoreboard... I felt like I was reading footnotes of my past... This hits hard to home, and the reality is... Black and white possibilities upon a stage of relaxed simplicity... Well... I do not the reality, but this was good, aha... Deeply penned...

[aj milton]

Thanks for your empathy!

[apennylate]

Thank you for the journey... Truly...

[mae23]

Really loved this! On thing that slightly confused me was the combination of past and present tense in the first two stanzas before revealing that the relationship is in the past. If intentional then totally ignore this! Anyway very much enjoyed reading it!

[aj milton]

Thanks! glad you liked it. Yes the tense changes are sort of intentional to show my state of mind changed... at least thats what I was trying to do

[mae23]

Okay! Then I think it works!