Chapter 1: The faults that follow hunger

Amanda is on her way home when she becomes hungry and the only thing she can think of is blood

         Chapter 1: The faults that follow hunger.
Amanda, that was me.
I was a bloodthirsty vampire until the day that i-
Died.

  I walked through the forest that led to my house, the night 
frightened me but i could take on any of it’s challenges.( Or so i 
thought)
My mind was on one thing : Blood.
Red, gushing blood, coming from the sweet spot of a humans neck. That 
thought alone made me go crazy inside and occasionally outside too.
( Trust me,this time it was definetely on the outside.)
   Then my brain took-over and i turned bloodthirsty. (Bloodthirsty: 
Vampire mode, crazy for blood,full on hunting or fighting mode.)
I started running toward my home but faster, there and then i could 
find the richest blood that existed : My parents, the full bloods. 
( Full bloods: The strongest vampires, that have blood that quenches 
their thirst, and the only vampires that can kill them are children of 
full bloods: the muni’s,which were extinct after amanda was born.)
I ran at full speed until i reached the small cottage and found the 
door wide open.

Reviews

[HugsAndHeartaches]

The punctuation is a tiny bit off;
- think about where capital letters go, and where to remove unnecessary capitals etc
The voice is a bit confusing, I generally make a point to avoid stories in which the character is talking to the reader in a very non-formal way, because it takes a lot of skill to change if from a 'fictional diary entry' to a :real: story.
^^Despite the somewhat harsh criticism, it's off to a good start :) good luck!