Despite it All

Despite all the bad,

you're the good I see.

Despite the present,

you're the future I call for.

Despite the challenges,

you're the one I will fight for.

Despite the mad thoughts that roam around,

you're the person I want to be around for.

Despite such a crappy world,

you make it seem like there's something real left here.

Despite my past mistakes,

you're the one who didn't give up.

Despite all I've done to potentially hurt you,

you stuck around to watch me flourish.

Thank you for being the one,

to keep me motivated,

and think there's still good in the world.

Author's Note

Beginner.. comments appreciated :)

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

Nicely written. This poem's heartwarming. All of us need people like this in our lives.

Onto the actual review. I enjoy the up-front manner you wrote this in. Poems like these usually benefit more from such an approach, as people can generally identify and sympathize with the topics being discussed more quickly and more easily. Most of the lines feel natural, with the exception of one;

Despite the want of not being here,

With this, I can tell what you're saying, but the wording itself is a bit clumsy. I recommend rewriting this one line in order to maintain the fluent nature the rest of the piece has.

And I did see what I think is a slight typo.


you make it seem like there's real left inside. Right after "there's" and before "real", I think you might have accidentally left a word out. Happens to me all the time.

Other than those critiques, I have nothing more to say. You've written a solid poem here. Keep on writing! :)

[Ajla]

Thank you, I'll definitely use this to improve this piece.

[DoormanDan]

No problem. Glad my review is of some use :)

[Jade]

I really enjoyed this heartwarming piece. It's very nicely written

[Ajla]

Thank you! I appreciate that.

[Jade]

not a problem