J and M...by Michael

Judith looked to the left of the campfire grounds she used to go to. A place her parents took her to on many summer vacations while growing up as a kid. The now forty year old walked in that direction to a wooded area she had hiked in before. Judith paused for a moment and then was drawn to a particular tree. J & M forever was carved in the bark which reminded of that special event some time ago when she was only fourteen years old. Her finger traced the heart around the initials that were once carved by her first true love. Michael looked to the left of the campfire grounds he used to go. A place his parents took him to on many summer vacations while growing up as a kid. He tapped her on the shoulder and she turned around as both remembered that special event. It was one year later that Judith and Michael went on their honeymoon together. In a nearby wooded area he took out his pocket knife and continued where history had left off so many years ago. Two smiles with tears and hugs included finished off a chapter in a romance to be continued. Case in point in a short love story about Judith and Michael, where fingers traced the heart around the initials J & M....
 
 
 
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Reviews

[alanwgraham]

I get your idea here of the two of them revisiting the tree with the initials. I don't think repeating the wording 'looked to the left etc' really works and i think the possibility of them being coming together after so long is unlikely. I find the ending a bit confusing - you say the romance is to be continued, but after their honeymoon. Is your final sentence to be continued? I think you could come up with a more likely and subtle idea for the two to get back together.
You have the basis of a good story here!
Regards,
Alan

[writ rajat]

Very nice concept I adore it

[matrixmark]

Itfelt like i was really involved in this story. Everything you wrote abiut was how it would play out on a movie scene.
Mark.

[Michael Reisman]

thank goodness for happy endings

[Dandelion]

this is a lovely story and i like that it comes back full circle to the place where love sparked, the beginning is marked and they return to leave their mark again, almost as if saying to anyone who happens past - hey, look at us, we're still together, it was real

[Michael Reisman]

See my 19 books of short stories and poems at www.michaelreisman.net

[Michael Reisman]

glad you enjoyed this and thank you so much!

[Tbear]

I am looking for inspiration, for ways to trigger my own ability to weave a short piece for the reader. I liked this..read it twice.. each time becomes more focused..Thank you for posting ..Write on..

[Michael Reisman]

See my 19 books of short stories and poems at www.michaelreisman.net

[Michael Reisman]

i hope i have triggered your own ability and just write from your heart.

[Michael Reisman]

Thank you so much. See my 19 books of short stories at www.michaelreisman.net

[Truths reflection]

Fascinating.
you took me into a different world.
I lived a love story, the beginning is sooo well written and it keeps you clinging.
The ending has made me starving for more more more.
I really think you are a fascinating writer hope to read more of your work

[Michael Reisman]

thank you for enjoying my writing!

[Kion B.]

Concise and emotional, I really liked the story. Great job.

[Michael Reisman]

Thank you so much. See my 19 books of short stories at www.michaelreisman.net

[Desirée Tolliver]

This is a very interesting short story. I really liked the beginning and I thought it was very interesting that both of them had been on summer vacations at the same campfire grounds. I really liked the ending as well. It sort of leaves me hungry for more. I would like to commend you on your creativity. Keep up the good work and good luck in your future endeavors. I look forward to reading more works by you in the future.

[Michael Reisman]

Thank you so much. See my 19 books of short stories at www.michaelreisman.net

[Desirée Tolliver]

You're very Welcome and I'll be sure to check into that :)

[Michael Reisman]

Enjoy whatever you select to read and I know you will!