Before We Fell Asleep..by Michael

It was soft and cuddly. Big round ears and sparkling
Brown eyes made me smile as we hugged and slept together.
Not an imaginary friend, but a real life childhood toy
That would listen to me without question.
One brown eye would wink at me before we fell asleep together.
My name is Theresa and I am six years old. Dolls never fascinated me,
Yet my teddy bear always did. His furry arms would
Always be around me when I woke up in the morning.
He was something that was saved as a child and kept with me
All through my adult years. My Teddy forever.
I introduced my new boyfriend who I met at my
Senior year in college to my parents. They were impressed and
Liked him just as much as I did. His name was Teddy and four
years later we eventually got married. One brown eye would
Wink at me before we fell asleep together....
 
 
 
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Reviews

[Red3Bravo]

That's cool. I love the power you pull out of so few words. Also, cool visual symmetry, the winking eyes. I don't see anything really to criticize. I guess, If you just want to see how spare you can go without losing the story's impact you could pare down the end a bit, but that's really just messing with nuts and bolts for fun. Cool little story.

[Michael Reisman]

Thank you so much for enjoying it! If interested, check out my 19 books of short stories at www.michaelreisman.net