A Summer Of Sounds And Images..by Michael

The crackling of burgers and hot dogs

On an open grill. The aroma that fills the air

Which makes the appetite soar. Splashing and the

Sound of laughter in an outdoor pool followed by

squeaking wet footprints of happy barefoot children.

The speeches over a microphone of graduating students

At the end of June. Seagulls squawk on a beach during

Sunrise and sunset as the soothing waves rush onto

The beaches sands. A brides emotional tears of joy are caught

By the man hired to film the outdoor wedding

In a summer of sounds and images. I love the natural light

Of the firefly twinkling like a star as the music

Of the crickets lulls me to peaceful sleep.

Perhaps a time of year that makes us smile.

A summer of sounds and images...

Reviews

[Rana Adalwolfa Simon]

I like the imagery here, although I feel like there are times when you show and times when you tell. Take this image: "A brides emotional tears of joy are caught / By the man hired to film the outdoor wedding" Since you've already shown there to be a bride, you don't need to tell that it's a wedding. The line before is the same, where you repeat the fact you're on a beach. Just the seagulls and the sand would be enough to show that. A little bit of trimming here and there to remove the repetition and allow the show to come through, and I feel this would be more powerful.

[Michael Reisman]

Glad you liked this.