Sara was finally released from a ten year prison sentence. It
was nice to wear regular street clothes once again and eat her favorite meals.
Now thirty five, she got lucky and found a job along with an apartment in which
to live. Life was starting all over again as she learned a hard lesson from her
previous mistakes and choices. She met Stewart in a shopping mall as they waited
on line together. He helped pay her bill as she was short by twenty dollars.
Then he also helped Sara pack the trunk of her car. His kindness for helping her
out had Sara invite him to dinner that evening at her apartment as he accepted.
It was a pleasant surprise for him as spaghetti was served, his all time
favorite dish. For the rest of the evening they talked and got to know each
other. Strangely enough she found out he was just released from prison after
serving a ten year sentence for the exact same crime that she had committed.
They both laughed out loud and then decided to celebrate their freedom and new
beginnings. Sara and Stewart took a car service to a local club about fifteen
minutes away. The early date turned into a late night affair as a full day and
evening was spent together. She was invited to spend the rest of their date at
his apartment only ten miles away from hers. One night cap and then a spaghetti
dish were prepared. No sex happened, but they just woke up in each others arms
as sometimes only a hug says it all. Their lives together were inseparable after
that. It made sense that these two met the way they did. Things in common often
do that. Sara and Stewart kissed at the wedding table six months later. Maybe we
meet under circumstances which follow the way things are supposed to happen. New
beginnings was a strong point and a final destination to where they needed to
go. Case in point in a short love story about Sara and Stewart, along with ten
years after...
This is great as it is and I realize it's your style, but I wanted to see more conversation and detailed description. For example, I wondered what led to their being in prison. Just something to consider. The concept itself is heartwarming and extremely romantic!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
I guess my short stories lack that more description and conversation. Yet if I added that, it would .. read moreI guess my short stories lack that more description and conversation. Yet if I added that, it would no longer be a short story.
Many stories that are considered short stories are much longer. I think it's still possible to add .. read moreMany stories that are considered short stories are much longer. I think it's still possible to add some depth to a story of this length. Of course the best way to learn how is to read well-regarded short story writers and see how they do it.
10 Years Ago
Very true. However when my heart tells me that it is done and complete, then I must end it.
10 Years Ago
Enough said then! Delving into your stories I have noticed some that are much more detailed, also.
This is great as it is and I realize it's your style, but I wanted to see more conversation and detailed description. For example, I wondered what led to their being in prison. Just something to consider. The concept itself is heartwarming and extremely romantic!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
I guess my short stories lack that more description and conversation. Yet if I added that, it would .. read moreI guess my short stories lack that more description and conversation. Yet if I added that, it would no longer be a short story.
Many stories that are considered short stories are much longer. I think it's still possible to add .. read moreMany stories that are considered short stories are much longer. I think it's still possible to add some depth to a story of this length. Of course the best way to learn how is to read well-regarded short story writers and see how they do it.
10 Years Ago
Very true. However when my heart tells me that it is done and complete, then I must end it.
10 Years Ago
Enough said then! Delving into your stories I have noticed some that are much more detailed, also.