For All Time..by Michael

Rodney went to beach for the last weekend as it would be closed for summer. A place he used to go to some ten years ago when attending high school. The sand and the waves were the same, yet the people were different. He got up off his blanket and decided to walk across the sand to a nearby snack bar. His foot stepped on something which he thought may have been a buried seashell. Rodney reached down and brushed the sand away to see something silver instead. He picked it up and saw something that made him cry. Rodney read the inscription on the preserved ankle chain. It said "Rodney and Rachel forever". A gift to his former senior high school sweetheart. An item lost by her some ten years ago. He reached the snack bar as there was only one customer ahead of him. When she turned to leave, they saw each other face to face.  A familiar love from ten years ago was recognized by both of them. He held up the ankle chain, then said, I believe you lost this, would you like it back?" Rachel just nodded her head up and down as she was too choked up with tears to respond. They held hands and walked back to the beach together. Two years later there was an outdoor wedding on a closed private section of the beach. The cover of their wedding album shows a silver ankle chain super imposed over the moonlit waves....Maybe we step on something that needs to be returned. An item of love that is worn once again which brought them together for all time....

 

 

 

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Author's Note

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Reviews

[Jaeger]

I like this story. It’s short but uses its words well to tell a complete tale. It’s also rather heartwarming and well written. That being said; I do think it could be improved. Keep in mind, I’m not an expert in writing; I wouldn’t even dare call myself a writer of any kind. This is just my personal opinion; take it with a grain of salt.

First, I do think some parts could use more descriptions. The main one for me is when the main character steps on what he thinks is a seashell. I’ve stepped on seashells before and believe me it can hurt quite a lot. How about describing the physical sensation Rodney felt and how he reacted? To me, that kind of details can make a story more active and engaging, though it’s possible to go overboard.

Speaking of active, several of your sentences use the passive voice instead of the active voice. Now, I’m not one of those who are against the passive voice: I think it has its place, but for me the text would be more engaging if it was a bit more active.

That’s about all I had to say. Good job and keep on the good work. I might check out your other books one of these days.

[Michael Reisman]

Thank you for enjoying this. I'm sure you would like any of my other books which catches your eye.

[Dandelion]

I enjoyed reading this story for it's simplicity and overall very good writing!

[Michael Reisman]

Thank you my dear Dandelion. I try my best to make the stories enjoyable.

[SmittyJas]

You write very well I will have to catch up on your seventeen books on another weekend. Great a story telling. I believe I have the gift also its fun never the less.

[Michael Reisman]

Thank you kind sir and enjoy whatever you choose from my 17 books. www.michaelreisman.net