ben

There once was a man from dundee,

who was obsessed with ben, his pet bee,

they were never apart,

once they went to wal mart,

then ben stung the man on his nose. apparently it really hurt a lot. gutted.      

  

Reviews

[Alice]

You are actually a genius.

[wolfshrew]

i cannot wait to see what else is up your sleeve and in your head

[celyn]

There once was (and still is) a girl from Cardiff
she's called Chloe
and she writes f*****g brilliant poetry.

[Frantzuu]

awesome poem :D

[sea lily]

hahahahahahah chlo you genius
i love this.
pure talent :)
xxxx

[Not A Writer]

Good poem, however, this line doesn't click with the fest of the poem

"then ben stung the man on his nose. apparently it really hurt a lot. gutted."

Your rhyme scheme was good than it fell apart due to the long sentence in line four. AABBC is your rhyme scheme. Either make line four shorter or make the rhyme scheme AABBCC.