Dear Mr. White Knight

My fantasy white knight.

Dear Mr. White Knight, You are late. I pine for you, though I know you not— how fair must be your face! How charming your sweet manners be, how kind! How subtle your wide grace – how free! – how pure and well-refined, like silver in a blacksmith’s fiery bind. I await your kiss with heart sincere, and remain, as ever, yours, A Maid Dearest Lovely Maid, Deepest apologies. What folly that I do not know your name! In beauty you are unsurpassed: how delicate your form, how elegant and poised! How vast the measure of your love, so warm and innocent, like an angel from the golden heavens sent. Be patient, love; in time I shall appear. I remain, as ever, yours, The Knight Dear Mr. White Knight, Sir, you are wrong! O, do not hold these misconceptions, pray, for I am far from fair. How dull and dreary are my eyes, how frail I am, how coarse my hair. And O, I am ineloquent, unwise and pale, as an imperfect diamond, cracked and stale! Shall I anticipate your coming, still? I remain, as ever, yours, A Maid O, my Dearest One, You are too cruel! Be still; I love you just the way you are. It is th’intrinsic beauty that I see: your tenderness and sweet, poetic voice, the loveliness of all you hope to be, your selflessness in questioning my choice: a precious pearl to make my heart rejoice! Do not despair my love, for come I will, Till then I am, as ever, yours, The Knight

Author's Note

The rhythm and rhyme scheme are a little funky...

Reviews

[Shadkim]

Awww, I loved this! I loved the language you used to place the letters in time and... just how cute it was. You know, it's tempting to write out something like that, even if you'd never get an answer. You descibed the wait perfectly - we wait for our knight, then doubt ourselves, and wait again. What a bittersweet wait it is! Very cool - good job! :D

[Charles D. Moorer]

I don't believe that I have ever encountered or remember the use of the epistorlary form in a poem, but you have carried it off remarkably well. I am not sure what you were going for in the rhyme scheme, but that would not be my concern. I would re-examine the format of the poem. A change in the length of the line might bring about a different reading and rhythm.

[Laura E. Aranda]

awwwwwwwwwwwwww
Complete and irrepairable TOE CURL
Heehee
I LOVE this one! It was fun and cute and romantic and completely out of the ordinary!
L O V E D
I T

Cheers,lea

[Gordon]

Very nicely done. I thought it was a good scheme. One can learn alot from your talents.

Favorite Line:
"your selflessness in questioning my choice:
a precious pearl to make my heart rejoice!"

Interesting choice of a pearl here. Pearls are made from the hard work of a clam polishing dirt. Much like our maid here.

And they live happily ever after!

[-Everchanging-]

Very cute, I dig it ^_^
Interesting style but it adds to it very well *Claps*

[darkgurl]

It is very well said and kind of emotional it seems, well written, I enjoyed the scheme.