You wanted to know about my day

It wasn't even significant-- nothing is when it happens alone.

Even art would die if it had nobody to wrap its vines around

and its roots would wither in the despairing mind of its host

if there was nobody else.

The beings were what mattered-- they made everything matter;

could make it scatter everywhere by disappearing from each other,

would wipe me from my life if I called them and they didn't answer

if this world forgot me.

there was a feat involved that I dismissed because it seemed trivial

compared to the complexity and beauty of the ones who stood

nearby, near each other, with connecting dots of air between them,

waiting for one more to join them.

He was asking something, something, nicely, after watching me,

and when I said it didn't seem to matter it was not because

I felt dismissive of his question, but because his question

did not seem meant to gather data.

I wanted to reply by telling him that he was the only reason

that a question like the one he asked would be worth answering,

not because the question was trite but because our connection there

was the only reason we ask these questions

And when I saw his kind face that cared about what happened as default

of caring about my life and so finding it worth asking about,

I couldn't hear the words he said because there was a softer sound

that I suddenly heard-- his simple presence.

Reviews

[raining]

Yes i liked it.

The writer needed this connection to this man, and because of the growing feelings between the two of them they find a deeper than words ...root. The poem is more story than poem, and I like this. Breaking the barriers between poetry and fiction.

"disapearing from each other", "a feat involved that I dismissed becaause it seemed trivial" and well, the entire poem really seems very thinky. Which is good if there is always that balence between image, metaphor and context (or real life lived experience) and the thinky parts. This is woven well by both and its edgy existential quality.... with the tone being comprehensible/incomprehensible which is the allure of the whole thing.

You have groups of words that remind me of Sylivia Plath but a notch less strident, which works for your poem.

(I don't "rate" anyone using a bubble other than within my review)

[shadadakiya]

sweet...good work

[Emily B]

This phenomenon you write of, is why many of us are here at the cafe. That understanding, that caring, that bond that defies words. . . you've expressed it all so well. Wonderful work.

[KAREN BROWN]

this was very well written,the thought emotion the insight. great job thank you for sharing with me.sorry haven,t gotten to this sooner i've been ill this is the 1st time i have been able to read anyones.

[Victoria Lee~]

I loved how you took your time with this and wrapped it all up with a perfect ending!

[Ice QueenJen]

You write this like its an ordinary day and end it with something very extraordinary!

Great write, keep writing.

[Spirit <White Wolf&g..]

this is good to feel alone and then finding someone to pick u up and keep u going i love it!!!!!! MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!

[An owl on the moon]

Such a beauty and depth in your conversational style moving us into your heart and mind, as well as the beautiful presence of one in your life. Amazing in movement and emotion.

Craig

[Jason Nuciola]

its ok

[bluessadmood]

nice words lots of thoughts,leave you wonder..
you say your question did not matter but because its you who said it,you could not hear the words but the soft sound of his presence ,you are much in love,so everything is not felt but his being around ,thats all you can fee....
you say nothing is significant even art if its not heeded and taken care of by human around ,its true its humans around us like a mirror we see ourselves so as you say...
would wipe life from me if i called them and they did not answer-your words-if this world forgot ..
very true what you say,but the first time i read it around here,that its people around who give us our importance,very truely said ,very thoughtful writing ,i enjoyed it ,made me think a lot