please curl with me

please curl up with me in the warmth in my heart,
I'll cut out a hole where you can sleep...
please share my dreams, and hold my hand,
I love you through every bone.
please send me postcards when you are away,
and promise you'll write everyday

we could build a home on the bottom of the sea
with a door filled with starfish, and clams to make beads
for pearl necklaces round and down your neck
feel the foolishness float back to land

please curl with me in the warmth in my heart
I’ll cut out a hole for you to sleep,
please share my dreams, hold my hand
I love you with all of my soul
please send me ribbons and hearts made of candy
and promise you'll write when your away?

I'd give up fighting, inviting you in
and cover your face with a starlet of sin
and we could climb a ladder up into the moon
till the sea of stars swallows our souls

please curl with me in this hole in my heart
I crafted it only for you
I'll share your burden, the weight of regret
if you say you'll love me too
please hold my hand when we turn out the light
the darkness echoes lightning in you

riding the waves of the tears in your eyes
my raft is sinking in down
my heart becomes all of the love it desires
and my throat opens up to your dreams

Reviews

[Heavyhearted]

i went back to find what part i liked the most... in every stanza thee was more than one line, so i gave up. this kind of poem is so heart-felt, i think it will make history. it is so well written and deep although it feels a little raw, but that's part of its charm. you are one of the best writers i have read here.
i want to be loved like that, everyone does... enough said.

[..R.I.P..]

This is a beautiful poem, whoever it was written for was loved greatly.

[X]

in the second stanza, the last line, it needs one more syllable. just a thought. i like the repetition you used on the first, third, and fifth stanza. i find myself doing things like this a lot. "I'd give up fighting, inviting you in
and cover your face with a starlet of sin" powerful lines right there. but the last line in stanza four is resembling a tongue twister. is there anything you could do with that? i don't think you're quite done with the poem though. it doesn't seem finished yet.
but that's up to you.
like i said.
it's a beautiful poem and whoever it's about or for is a very lucky person.
i hope you don't take this as my being rude, i'm just trying to be honest and help.
good work.
monica.