I Am Just a Statistic

I Am Just a Statistic

A Poem by luvy
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kinda long i know. read the "note for reviewers" please and my "about me" if you have time:)

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I am here
But I am bruised and I am broken.
I am in a warm house
But I am cold and I am alone.
I am with my parents.
But Daddy hits and Mommy ignores.


I am just a statistic.


I am here
But I am in this economy and I am without shelter.
I am the parent of hungry children.
But I lost my job and I lost my lifesyle.
I am angry
But that is useless and that is draining.


I am just a statistic.


I am here
But I am ridiculed and I am laughed at.
I am not like everyone else
But I have a 9-mm semi-automatic handgun and I have revenge.
I am two weeks from graduation
But I have nothing to lose and I have nothing to gain.


I am just a statistic.


I am here
But I am filled with poison and I am filled with death.
I am flying high
But I do not stay up long and I do not come down easy.
I am losing control
But I need another sip and I need another fix.


I am just a statistic.


I am here
But I said no and I said it again.
I am a not a fighter
but I did kick and I did scream.
I am still alive
But he took something from me and he took everything from me.


I am just a statistic.


I am here
But no one is listening and no one is caring.
I am a mind full of insignificant and burdensome troubles
But all that will end soon and all that will be gone.
I am out of choices
But I have a rope and I have an escape.


I am just a statistic.
But when do I become real to you?
When will I emerge from the newspapers and when will I emerge from the movies?
When will I stop being thought of as, “You only see that on TV” and “That could never happen to me.”

Because I am not just a statistic,
I am real,
and I am here

© 2010 luvy


Author's Note

luvy
Okay, so I am NOT depressed or anything and I am NOT any of the people I described in this poem, I just see a lot of hurt in people sometimes...
This is the first thing I ever published for other people to see, so it's kinda a big step for me, haha, so I'm a little bit scared of judgement, but I can take it, I swear! So please review, anything is appreciated, really.

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Vin
This is amazing! I actually had goosebumps whilst reading it! Each point you made throughout this write was the absolute truth and the anger shown towards it was so captivating! There's only one small thing I'm not sure about, when I finished the last stanza I thought, although it is really good, I kind of felt that maybe something along the lines of "and I am me" could be put in for the last line, but I don't know. It's just the way I think I guess, you definitely do not have to change it, I'm just making a suggestion :)
But all in, it was one wicked write! Great job!

-Beth

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Incredible.
That's all I can really say.
The repetition helped the poem a lot, the rhythm was good...
And the message was amazing.

Excellent piece.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Vin
This is amazing! I actually had goosebumps whilst reading it! Each point you made throughout this write was the absolute truth and the anger shown towards it was so captivating! There's only one small thing I'm not sure about, when I finished the last stanza I thought, although it is really good, I kind of felt that maybe something along the lines of "and I am me" could be put in for the last line, but I don't know. It's just the way I think I guess, you definitely do not have to change it, I'm just making a suggestion :)
But all in, it was one wicked write! Great job!

-Beth

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

what can i say..
WOW!!! this is amazing - dripping with so much feeling. While you may not be any of the people described in the poem, you very well could have been all of them for the description you give and with so few words!
I cannot wait to read more from you

~Wandering Soul~

Posted 14 Years Ago



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