I am

I am

A Poem by Jinx
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I am

"

I am


I am Ozymandias

King of your King

You, like he, will

Quake and break before me.


I am Moses, son of a slave,

With power to deliver us

And lead you blind

In the desert to die.


I am Joshua,

The forgotten man

Who died two deaths of water

And wood so you may live

Through fire.


I am William Wallace,

A brave heart, who could

Not bend. My last words

Choked from me: freedom.


I am the failed artist,

Whose masterpiece to be 

Fueled by our same flame

Leaves a grease-stain memory. 


I am a freedom fighter,

A premature martyr,

Yet you will remember me

As a bloody tyrant.


I am a peacemaker,

A prophet whose

Dark history is eclipsed

By my dream made yours.


I am an arrogant

Boy, humbled by

The whispers of our past

Unsure of the face of the future.

© 2011 Jinx


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I am really glad you sent this my way man. I really like the tone that you use. It is very commanding to start. The first three stanzas are really filled with that and an underlying powerful voice that is wholly yours. The sharp images you create in lines such as, "You, like he, will/ Quake and break before me." and "lead you blind/ in the desert to die: really help that power grow.

I also really like your progression from Oymandias to the "arrogant boy." It was almost as if you were stripping back the layers of history to discover who the boy was. Once that process had occurred, I could see the boy in the world of today questioning the things of the past, wondering if these dark days could be any better.

I think the last two lines also really makes me wonder what the boy will become. That is another reason I like the progression of character which build to him. It is because I can imaging this boy considering if a face of the past fits him, or if he must create a new one for his new age.

Really well done man, I am digging it, and I am glad that you have joined the WC!



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Jinx
Jinx

Broomall, PA



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