Phoenix Rises

This was written using the Repeating Quisset invented by Michael.

Flames climb brightly in moonlight,

 

To circle,

gleaming,

like starlight;

 

to reveal Phoenix’s mystical climb,

 

From ashes,

empowering,

renewing time;

 

new life ascends as starlight,

 

To rise,

pristine,

in moonlight;

 

   wings spreading brilliance embracing time,

 

To rejoice,

transcendent,

spiriting climb.

 

Author's Note

This was an interesting undertaking for someone who writes freeform and doesn't use usual structure patterns. I enjoys doing it once i figured how it works....

Thank you Michael for all your help :) ...AT

The Repeating Quisset, invented- copyrighted by Michael
consists of sixteen lines with a 2-1 rhyme.
Written with 8 stanzas, in a 1-3 pattern.
The syllable formula is:
7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4 // 7 // 2-2-3 // 10 // 3-3-4.
With a specific line pattern as follows:
The last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th and 13th line must be A//B//A//B.
Repeating the same rhythm as the last words in the 1st, 5th, 9th,and 13th line,
the 4th, 8th, 12th and 16th line must be A//B//A//B.
The 1st and 4th line must be A//A. The 5th and 8th line must be B//B.
The 9th and 12th line must be A//A.
The 13th and 16th line must be B//B.
With 12 counts, the last word in the 1st line must be the same last word as in the 12th line.
Repeating 12 counts, the last word in the 5th line must match the last word in the 16th line.
Being five counts between the 1st and 5th line, the last word in the 4th line and the 9th line must be the same.
Repeating 5 counts, the last word in the 8th line must be the same as the last word in the 13th line.
With a specific syllable count as follows:
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1
1-1-2-1-2
1-1
2
1-2
1-2-3-3-1
1-2
3
3-1

Reviews

[C.R. Moore "Lasla"]

Strong imagery and a style is exciting and challenging......... An excellent job!!!
I love the content and its message is excellent and choice of words is superb!!!!!!
This is defiantly a more complex form of writing..kudos to you for having the courage to explore teh differnt styles and expand your writing!!! Thanks for the request!!!!!!!!!


Blessed Be!
Lasla

[Antony]

Amazingly beautiful, and a whole lot of work done on this, I can see this pictueresque piece is well thought out, just beautiful Amanda.
Tony

[R J Askew]

Blood hell...I am discombobulated by this form! I don't know what to say! I have only just got over the shock of writing my first sestina, so I am actually shocked that there are even more fiendishly complex forms. But I suppose I am naive. I take my hat off to the inventor and you for having a go. The poem is pleasing to read, positive and inspiring with strong images.

[Ralphy]

Wow, this is a unique and wonderful piece. I love the transformation and description of flight. I never knew it could sound so wonderful and quite appealing to the eye. Thanks for sharing it.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Wow! The syllabus count is really amazing here, and I can see here that you've worked a lot on it...I agree with Dani that phoenix is always a great theme to write upon.
Great work as always! :)
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I LIKE IT

[Poetic Injustice]

I suck at math. I love this piece. Write on.

[Dani California]

Wow Amanda!! .. this is wonderful! I know you've been working
on this for awhile.. and it's impressive indeed.

I'm truly blown away...

The phoenix... what an awesome theme!!

Excellent work, and then some.... you go girl... !!

[Michael X]

I love the thought you put into this poem amanda,
Its beautifully invented, and you certainly did the form justice,
and then some. also the idea of the phoenix is classic and you
managed to capture such magic, its nice to see the effort and time
you put into the wording and imagery, brilliantly done,
I look forward to reading this again.. and again.