A Dream

My first poem :/

Can someone wake me up

from this dream?

I don't need to see the

monsters that are

running in my head.

I don't want to see the

blood dripping down

my legs.

Wake me from 

this nightmare,

before it is too late. 

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Emunah June.]

Oooooou~ Creative. I like the way you presented it. :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I don't think this is a wake form a dream scenario. I feel this has a lot to do with the roster of puberty, and the changes a young female might represent in her head of billing means. Well done, great imagery.

[.OnlyMe.]

This is very well written! I like it a lot.

[Yina]

Nice... I'd wake you if I could:)

[Jill Wallflower]

Wow, this is good!

[Vanessa Rico]

I can definitely feel your pain that you have described here. You have quite a talent to create such imagery that your audience can distinctly feel that emotion as well! Good job!

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

"I don't need to see the
monsters that are
running in my head.

I don't want to see the
blood dripping down
my legs."

These two stanzas were fantastic. This poem could use a little bit of work, but I still really liked it. :) Keep writing!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. The poem is direct and strong. I like the desire and the emotion of trying to escape dreams. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[NickyGL]

This is very intrusting, I must say. Its kind of dark, and seems that your in some kind of pain in this dream, not wanting to face something you have too. Well thats what i see, but everyone sees different things. This is a very good peice and a great first poem. Very well done, Please keep writing.

NickyGL

[Kiri Nells]

It's simple, again, but I like it! Great write!