This would make an awesome song.
The theme is actually really clever.
IT would be one of those songs you hear for entire year
then go...OHHHHHHH I GET IT....
And everyone looks at you like...DUHHHHHHHH
Bad? No, it shows that the persona has been hurt and has perhaps learned a thing a or two by the experence the persona has been educated by the experance and has learned what to watch for in the next relationship tha5t's a positive reaction IMHO well done!
It starts off like we think it's completely hopeful and then the wave of suspense is put in where we realize it's a sinking ship, it's heartache combined with happy ending.
Why must you always say things like that?
This isn't a bad write.
It seems as if you don't have confidence in your own
work when you say things like that.
This is a good poem.
You did a good job.
It isn't bad, it's beautiful! The final line rounds the poem off perfectly, in terms of structure, and the deep meaning you have captured in everyday words like 'play' and 'pause' are incredible. A lovely piece, my friend :)
I think we all feel this way once or a hundred times in our lives. To rewind and change, or to forward when we want to let out. The last line is also very clever.
"I want to never be played again"
Very very nice :)
It is not bad. This is very moving. I have felt like this on some day where I want it all to be started over and never have to have felt the way. Yesterday was a day where I wanted to just start over and do it over. I had my entire Creative Writing class tell me I was the worst writer in the world, and I felt like just giving up and what was the use. No one likes me as a writer, but then I became angry thinking, I won't let them get me down. No matter what happens, don't look at the past but the future.
dont like my poems? too bad.
dont like me? well the block button is write over there next to the flag button.
dont like my friends? suck it.
dont like anything? die already.
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