it doesn't suck. it's simple, which is what I like about your style of writing. the basic lines also really work for the theme of the poem, because it's as if someone took all the words from your mouth (keyboard?) too. You have a great talent of getting your message across while saying so little. So while the subject is sad, you still have kick-a*s writing skills.
Raw, truthful and not forced. The things that you are going through must be insanely tough to cope with, but don't let it consume you. Put it into poetry. Certainly helps me to an extent.
Although I've never experienced this, I could almost still feel like I could relate somehow. This poem didn't suck, and it was actually great. The last line was almost haunting. And sad. Short, powerful poems, like the one you have here, are such a joy to read. But I'm sorry you're having such a hard time. I hope everything brightens up for you ASAP. :) Great job.
it doesn't suck. it's simple, which is what I like about your style of writing. the basic lines also really work for the theme of the poem, because it's as if someone took all the words from your mouth (keyboard?) too. You have a great talent of getting your message across while saying so little. So while the subject is sad, you still have kick-a*s writing skills.
dont like my poems? too bad.
dont like me? well the block button is write over there next to the flag button.
dont like my friends? suck it.
dont like anything? die already.
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