What If I Died?

  What if I just dropped dead?

  That would make you happy,

  Wouldn't it?

  If my soul was just

  Sucked right out

  Of my body,

  And taken to hell.

  That would put

  A smile on your face,

  Wouldn't it? 

  All of you would laugh,

  And be thankful

  I am dead. 

  Don't worry.

  I will die soon. 

Author's Note

Probably gonna die soon. I don't know.

Reviews

[hopelove]

wow alice if you need to talk im here

[raindroplove]

wow please dont die

[Katannaism]

This just screams 'tragedy'. This is a very strong and emotional piece-Especially since its about Death. This is a very good piece that projected the emotion very well. Even though this is a very...fierce piece, its a very good read.

[Darkbynight]

Don't expect the worst, or they'll always find their perfect little ways to you...but of course, if you get tired of waiting, we might be tempted to just take thing in control for ourselves...:/
I'm confusing myself....but anyway....GREAT PIECE! :)
I wrote a piece I believe you might like...isn't very similar to this, but they have basically the same main idea...called it "Almost Too Late" Check it out :)

[A.E. Surdam]

Well, I hope you do not. I like your poems and value as a friend. You are unique as you are. And be proud of that. Your past makes up who you are and you choose to do with it what you want. I hope you see the value in life and see the doors to take and make the choices. We make the wrong choice once in a while but it's not the end because each step we take creates us in different ways. Always see the light in the tunnel because "if you are going through hell, keep going" and "what doesn't kill you makes you stronger" these are two quotes I live by. Every time I am down, I read these and know that this is not the end but only the first chapter. Be brave and strong because sometimes there will be times you feel like you are weak or not good enough, but remember there will always be those around you, even though you may not realize, who really value who you are.

[Sukriti Suki]

This is very sad...

[NickyGL]

I for one say you cant die. This poem was good.

[Yina]

I've that way to:( but I wouldn't be happy if that happened to you

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple and the lines are stripped bare to show this raw and interrupted emotion, well written, good read.

[Katub]

Easy to relate well done xxx