I don't like criticizing at all, and I don't even know if this would be counted as that, but maybe for your poems if you have an issue with them, view these all as practice, your trial ones, develop in them and on the side your own unique voice and style, your stamp. I never used to do rhyming or anything when I first started out, and really you don't have to, poetry is not all about rhymes, but what it is about really is creating yourself how you truly wish to be in this world of paint and pens and paper and words and messages hidden and shown. The grouping of your sentences is basically everything of importance, if it doesn't sound right to you, it might at moments sound slightly uneasy in flow to your readers also, even though we do have a lot of good things to say.
Your poems arent lame at all. What I find the best thing about your poems are, how you combine little and simple words together and create a whole different deeper meaning.
I don't like criticizing at all, and I don't even know if this would be counted as that, but maybe for your poems if you have an issue with them, view these all as practice, your trial ones, develop in them and on the side your own unique voice and style, your stamp. I never used to do rhyming or anything when I first started out, and really you don't have to, poetry is not all about rhymes, but what it is about really is creating yourself how you truly wish to be in this world of paint and pens and paper and words and messages hidden and shown. The grouping of your sentences is basically everything of importance, if it doesn't sound right to you, it might at moments sound slightly uneasy in flow to your readers also, even though we do have a lot of good things to say.
dont like my poems? too bad.
dont like me? well the block button is write over there next to the flag button.
dont like my friends? suck it.
dont like anything? die already.
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