I AM A GIFT

I am that gift which was never opened

I am that treasure which was never discovered

I am that sun which was never seen

But in the sky it has always been

I am that heart that never got a chance to beat

I am that eye that never saw your face

I am that love who never felt your tears heat

But you don't want me in any case

I am that moon which never came

I am that star which never shine

After losing me you won't feel the same

You are throwing me away like a bottle of wine

I am that thing you don't want

You didn't give me a chance to call you ''mom''

I am the thing you want no more

I am unborn baby of yours

Reviews

[Adam, the Grub Street L..]

It is a moving poem against abortion (and there are some real corking anti-abortion poems out there).

I thought I'd try my hand at a small response to yours.

I am that screwed up person who was planted with a baby.
My life spirals down the tube and I'll drag you there with me.
I resent you and I hate you, I wish you'd never come.
How many times must I say, NEVER call me mom.

[murrill]

You put a lot of resentment against your mom or sombodies mom, I guess you have good reason based on your other poem and this one. However I am all against abortion to me its murder. Great job on the poem

[Keith]

Wow, this is a great POV piece that speaks strongly against abortion. Your imagery makes for the stark telling of loss.
Thank you for sharing it.

I only noticed this problem:
I am (the) unborn baby of yours

Very well done!

[afra]

thank you so much

[Maximillion]

beautiful love it keep writing

[afra]

thank you ...^-^

[Maximillion]

it really is beautiful

[afra]

awww

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Wow, amazing as always, great pathos, I can really see your touch in this poem, could recognize the writer among thousands of other writers

[afra]

aww thanks

[外人 (Gaijin)]

just telling the truth ;)

[afra]

awwww

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Beautiful and touching, and it has a perfect rhythm.
I'm sorry if you really feel this way.

[afra]

thank you

[Aehr]

meaningful.. i'm totally in favor of the anti-abortion thing. the flow is really good.. kinda makes you sad, when you think from the point of view of a little aborted baby, ignoring the fact that an infant so small may not be able to think.. well done!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Whoa, this could've gone a few ways. I like how it ended up.

[None]

Very declarative. Eerily heart wrenching. Powerfully stated. This poem carries meaning.

[Barbara Walker]

This is very descriptive of an unborn baby's thoughts. I won't get into the politics here, just a great write on a sensitive subject. Third stanza, 2nd line, if you want to keep the rhyme, to be grammatically correct, "I am the star, that will never shine". And last line, "I am an unborn baby of yours." As usual, I have to gripe about punctuation! Use it, please!

[Marissa]

this is really good also....it's so real and honest...amazing