YOU MAKE THIS WORLD A BETTER PLACE

YOU MAKE THIS WORLD A BETTER PLACE

A Poem by afra

The best time together we have shared 
When the whole world turned their back on me 
You are the only who loved me and who cared 

No matter where my path may turn 
You are always with me 
And you never let my dreams burn 

No matter what my dreams may be 
You always give me hope 
And you help me believe 

You never let me down 
Your crazy jokes make me smile 
You always change my frown 

You are my buddy , my angel and my best friend 
When the whole world disappoints me 
You are the only one who holds my hand 

For me you are not less than a gift  from above 
Who showed me the meaning of love 
You always bring a big smile on my face 
You make this world a better place 

© 2012 afra


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I would omit the fifth stanza. The type of girl who likes it also likes Avril Lavigne. The rest is perfect. Oh and the last two lines? I think that's already like a thing, like a bumper sticker or something. The path turning stanza is pretty profound. The whole world not caring is BIG and keeps pacing up. Overall, you get an A. Lol.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I LOVED the fifth stanza. The whole thing was great! I also thought it was the perfect length. Very nice. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really want this line "For me you are not less than a gift for me from above" to be "For me you are not less than a gift from above" it's petty, I know, but I'm a stickler for flow. Aside from that tiny, very petty criticism, I really like this poem and its meaning, it has a very genuine feel to it. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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