HIT YOUR GOAL

Don't let your dreams fade 

Love can defeat hate 

Time is just a thief 

Steals happiness and leaves you in grief 

Live like you will die tomorrow 

So don't let yourself die in sorrows 

Forget what you have lost and learn to move on 

No one can break you as long as they know you are strong 

Learn from your mistakes 

But don't let them break you 

Just be real and pure 

So that no one can make you insecure 

Don't give a damn what other people say 

Cause you are beautiful in your own way 

Be the star of your own sky 

You are always a winner as long as you try 

Open your heart and free your soul 

And when the time comes hit your goal 

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great job with metrica, I guess I can say without problems, that (at least for the people I know) you're the "queen of the couplets in WC", you just write them so naturally and superbly at the same time. The flow is amazing, and it doesn't hurt AT ALL watching you finally write a "good mood type" of poem !! You make such great works when you do it !!

[An owl on the moon]

Your words are so uplifting, lyrical and moving the heart to greater things... How we need to be filled with anthems like this to make the world ever so much better wherever we stand. Thank you, dear poet for hitting that mark so well.

Love the motivation, style, meter, and meaning.
You did a very good job with this write. Hats off.

E.L.

[Carrie]

I love inspirational poems and this one is superb! Good work!

[harry]

good job ...i am really impressed by your work ....keep writing

[The dark story]

Learn from your mistakes
But don't let them break you

this is the best line according to me...the rest is impeccable.......but yeah i don't think that time is a thief which takes away our sorrow and leave us unhappy..i think that time is a great healer.......

[JC]

very positive, upbeat and motivating, good job Afra.

[Falling Leaf.]

Very nice. The rhythm is a little awkward because some lines are much longer than others, but then again, each line shines with inspiration. A couple things: in the third stanza, second line, I would use a different word other than die, since it was just read in the previous line. Maybe "drown" intead? Another thing: you spelled damn wrong. Other than that, lovely....

Kindest regards and best of luck,
Savannah

[Marissa]

Great point to this

[Celestial Witch Child]

I feel like the rhyme scheme distracts from the overall quality of the piece.