HIT YOUR GOAL

Don't let your dreams fade 

Love can defeat hate 

Time is just a thief 

Steals happiness and leaves you in grief 

Live like you will die tomorrow 

So don't let yourself die in sorrows 

Forget what you have lost and learn to move on 

No one can break you as long as they know you are strong 

Learn from your mistakes 

But don't let them break you 

Just be real and pure 

So that no one can make you insecure 

Don't give a damn what other people say 

Cause you are beautiful in your own way 

Be the star of your own sky 

You are always a winner as long as you try 

Open your heart and free your soul 

And when the time comes hit your goal 

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great job with metrica, I guess I can say without problems, that (at least for the people I know) you're the "queen of the couplets in WC", you just write them so naturally and superbly at the same time. The flow is amazing, and it doesn't hurt AT ALL watching you finally write a "good mood type" of poem !! You make such great works when you do it !!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No one can break you as long as they know you are strong not sure this line makes sense and you repeat break you in the next verse! You could relax into your writing and I definately think you should stop lloking for rhymes and TRYING to write poetry. Let the poetry write itself. You have the emotion in you: feel it!

[gombeggar]

nice composition, girl

[Kaylor Mason]

Nice! Everyone in the world should recite this to themselves every day; it would make this planet a place worth living in, every moment

[Ian H Morrison]

like this really like it for one it is well written clearly thought out and very well presented

[Wolf]

I really like it!
THIS IS WHAT PEOPLE SHOULD ALWAYS REMEMBER!!!
Never forget your goal, always remain on track!

Very nice!
Keep up the good work! ^_^

[Nabeela Mobashwer]

Pretty amazing ^.^

[Antonio Valentino]

just watched us beat canada in womens soccer a while ago... this poem blends nicely with how they all must have felt during the game..

a splendid piece

:)

[That_Guy]

well said

[That_Guy]

the only part I would change is, "No one can break you as long as they know you are strong " I live by No one can break you as long as YOU know you are strong

[afra]

okay thanks

[That_Guy]

still great poem though

[afra]

=)

[Mercelus]

I really liked this, it was well worded and got your point across.
too often do people allow what other think cloud their minds and end up defeating themselves before they do the things they have always wanted to do.
good write.

[Tomi]

'Be the star of your own sky
You are always a winner as long as you try'.. A very uplifting piece...people need to read stuff like this and remind themselves of how beautiful they are no matter what happens..Thank you for sharing..Well done!