HIT YOUR GOAL

Don't let your dreams fade 

Love can defeat hate 

Time is just a thief 

Steals happiness and leaves you in grief 

Live like you will die tomorrow 

So don't let yourself die in sorrows 

Forget what you have lost and learn to move on 

No one can break you as long as they know you are strong 

Learn from your mistakes 

But don't let them break you 

Just be real and pure 

So that no one can make you insecure 

Don't give a damn what other people say 

Cause you are beautiful in your own way 

Be the star of your own sky 

You are always a winner as long as you try 

Open your heart and free your soul 

And when the time comes hit your goal 

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great job with metrica, I guess I can say without problems, that (at least for the people I know) you're the "queen of the couplets in WC", you just write them so naturally and superbly at the same time. The flow is amazing, and it doesn't hurt AT ALL watching you finally write a "good mood type" of poem !! You make such great works when you do it !!

[Osh]

The couplet form really suits you. This piece is incredible, and your use of vocabulary and rhyme is superb. Great writing I must say

[Speakoftherevol]

This Is a very real poem straight from the heart. It's easy to read, on the surface almost too simple, but It's truly raw honesty as deep as life(which ppl can think Is more complicated than It really Is). You show alot of soul and talented poetic Insight here. A keeper no doubt. Hope to read/share more!. God bless friend -Brandon

[dillonjensen]

Such a wonderful and empowering piece. Kudos, miss. :)

[annie lee]

These are great words comprising stellar advice in charming couplets. I admire your structure discipline. If I wander off the path of haiku, tanka or free verse, I sound stilted and insincere. This poem is not at all stilted, and the sincere truth shines through. Your couplets build in intensity until at the end, the reader is feeling the warmest of fuzzies: encouragement. These words banish gloom and loneliness; that's a great accomplishment for a poet.

[dw817]

Time - I think Jean Luc Picard said best what this is.

Picard: "Someone once told me that time was a predator that stalked us all our lives. But I rather believe that time is a companion who goes with us on the journey and reminds us to cherish every moment because they'll never come again. What we leave behind is not as important as how we've lived."

"Be the star of your own sky." This is lovely ! Minju, I think a single star in the sky would look rather lonely, and there is not a single star that can ever form a figure in the sky - you will always need friend stars to help you with that.

Please cherish all your time on this precious Sapphire Earth, Afra - and I believe you will most definitely - hit your goal. :)

[Rahul]

I'm gonna steal your this write...lol :)
i liked this write, it showed and in real it really contained so much rhyme and i loved this piece, me too write such a nice piece's which contains rhymes but my grammar's not so good and due to my this grammatical errors i've unpublished my all nice writings...but i know i'll improve myself and i'll be right here again...anyway, i liked this piece, your theme's so nice and i really enjoyed this piece, you made my evening. :)
1oo/1oo

[Arun Paul Kapur]

Absolute gem here. We should believe in ourselves more often as well.

[Aya]

beautiful motivating word and full of truth ''you are always a winner as long as you try'' i couldn't agree more for the true fail is the failure of trying.
great write

[ObscurityNone]

This is pretty nice, simple and true.

[Muhammad Qasim]

awesome