THE PERSON WHO CHANGED MY LIFE

My world came to an end 

I had no one to love ,I had no friends 

Then an angel of God send for me from above 

Showed me the meaning of love 

He made me be feel beautiful and special 

He gave me a reason to stay alive 

Made me realize that I am not the only one who goes through the pain 

He gave me my smiles my happiness and my life once again 

His songs healed the scars on my soul 

And now his music makes me whole 

No matter how old I get 

I will never ever forget 

The person who showed me how to live 

The person who changed my life 

Reviews

[devon]

This is a sweet poem, and it's a great dedication to the person who did in fact change your life. :)

Again, you have some minor grammar errors.

"He gave me my smiles my happiness and my life once again", should be changed to, "He gave me my smiles, my happiness, and my life once again".


"I will never ever forget" needs to be corrected to, "I will never, ever forget".


"I had no one to love ,I had no friends" to "I had no one to love - I had no friends."

"Then an angel of God send for me from above", this line is nice, but it is confusing. Maybe change it to, "Then an angel of God, sent from above,"?

Again, your poetry is really nice and the flow is great. :)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I believe it is up to us to find the meaning of life, without any help.
Your poem reminds me of my friend's words, though: "Life doesn't make sense until we start living it for someone else." I'm glad you found that someone, assuming you actually did.
Good poem. The only thing I minded was the inconsistent rhyming.

[Alicia Beavis]

In places the rhythm can go off but reading it aloud and making a few adjustments should rectify that. Otherwise, not a bad read in the slightest and the ending was sweet.

[Alana McGuire]

Aww, this is really pretty. I'm glad you have been changed for the better and that you're happy. :)

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

sweet, soft, and beautiful. everything a great poem should be. :D

[MOON]

Very well expressed good write.

[Laura Maidah]

Comma splice in the second sentence. Tech issue. Otherwise a lovely piece.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A wonderful write. Thank you for sharing. Though I am a firm believer that we alone give ourselves meaning and purpose in life, though believe me there are those few special “angles” that help bring to life the hidden parts of us that holds the key to enabling us to do so. A wonderful write! Thank you for sharing this.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Be cautious of typos and punctuation. Other than that this is a terrific piece.

[Lindsay T]

Wow, I love this! Must be a special someone, huh? :)

[BLACK PRINCE]

THIS BEAUTIFUL AND SINCERE