FAKE

Burnt hopes , broken dreams

Taking pain to a new extreme

The lie becomes the truth by the time 

Dreams get broken down like a bottle of wine

Useless tears , broken heart 

The goodbyes have torn me apart

Broken promises under hidden lies 

They laugh as they watch all my dreams die 

Like a normal human being I am full of mistakes

It's better not to be more perfect rather than being fake

Reviews

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

True true, this is how the story goes as we find ourselves through broken dreams like shattered window panes. With each promised broken a new direction is created for lining. Well written and thank you for the great read. To be “fake” is to cheat both ourselves and the ones we meet.

[Redboy]

this is awesome! u should take the normal out of the last line though, breaks the flow some how

[Jordan A. Wilson]

last two lines, golden

[Lindsay T]

Relatable and nicely written. Keep up the good work, you have a strong poetic voice that makes me want to read more.

[BLACK PRINCE]

You are right
I don't like fakes
like the bites
of sneaky snakes.

I believe
keep it real
don't deceive
say what you feel.

[Liderien]

this is very raw and emotional. Very personal; its real. I love it!

[Emrys Realmskip]

The second line is my favorite... Over all this piece is immaculate :)

[Btwixer]

heartfelt piece, nice write

[Harley (arbiter)]

I like it! True and good. Nice

[mariah]

hey, nice job on the poem. i noticed that you are improving in your grammar :) thats great, it helps make the poems easier to read.
-mariah

[MoriartyMesa]

This was nice, heartfelt and a bit of a slap.


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