FAKE

Burnt hopes , broken dreams

Taking pain to a new extreme

The lie becomes the truth by the time 

Dreams get broken down like a bottle of wine

Useless tears , broken heart 

The goodbyes have torn me apart

Broken promises under hidden lies 

They laugh as they watch all my dreams die 

Like a normal human being I am full of mistakes

It's better not to be more perfect rather than being fake

Reviews

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

True true, this is how the story goes as we find ourselves through broken dreams like shattered window panes. With each promised broken a new direction is created for lining. Well written and thank you for the great read. To be “fake” is to cheat both ourselves and the ones we meet.

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The lie becomes the truth by the time
Dreams get broken down like a bottle of wine

I totally loved this part, this is wonderful

[Ink Angel]

Love the last stanza Its better not to be perfect rather than be fake so true !

[CaSi]

I like it very deep:) well structured as well

[Fabio_Cassilias]

Thats The Truth There..

[Marissa]

I love this it's so real and very much true

[Krista Weiss]

Really loved it :)

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great as always, the way you follow such a great flow and play it all on assonances is amazing, not to mention the great amount of pathos you give us all the time, you have A LOT of talent :)
... Wish one day to be as good as you :)

[Pax]

i like the first stanza, i love the rhythm. keep it up.