THE PAIN I HIDE

pI'll lock my tears in my eyes,
i won't show my pain,
i will hide my tears in the rain,

you never know the things which you should know,
i should feel the pain which i don't like to show ,

I'll bury my sorrows inside my chest ,

I won't tell any one what i am going through ,

cause the people who love me so ,
will always know ,
about the pain i hide and the pain i show ,

Reviews

[GunMetal]

There's a rogue p on your first line. I also notice that some of you're "I"s are capitalized intermittently. My suggestion is to stay consistent with capitalization.

Sometimes we hide our burdens, we're transparent to the ones we matter to. Good write.

[Coyote Poetry]

Most people hide their sadness. Hard to express disappointment and sadness. I like the way you wrote the story and the strong ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Whiskurz]

I wrote a poem called "Broken" it talks about a poet's pain.....this is well penned my friend......Whisk