THAT GIRL

I see a girl who is only fourteen

Have you ever wondered where her smiles have been?

Did you ask why she bleeds tears?

Can't you see she is drowning with fears

Every day she wakes up her dreams die

You called her a liar 

Never asked why she had to make up lies

I face her every day

She wishes to die

How can I see which no one else can see

Only cause that girl is me

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is emotional and touching, conveying the fears and uncertainty of growing up. The only thing I might suggest (and it's no big deal, really) is to alter slightly the last two lines. They might read 'How can I see what no one else can see. Only because that girl is me.' Or not. It's a fine poem.

[mariah]

beautifuly written, and i love the ending, great twist. very sad, but meaingful too.
-mariah

[Liderien]

The torment inside is a wretched place, and yet at the same time a place of solace. No one can save the girl but you. And you must save that girl, just like I did.

[MOON]

Poignant thoughtful write , well written.

[BLACK PRINCE]

LIFE IS WORTH LIVING
THE WORLD NEEDS A VOICE LIKE YOURS
THE WORLD NEEDS TO READ YOUR BOOKS
THE WORLD NEEDS TO LEARN A LOT FROM YOU
YOUR OPINION MATTERS TO THE WORLD
THE WORLD WANTS TO SEE YOU LIVE

LIVE...... LIVE.....live

[Jordan A. Wilson]

this is deep, bravo for allowing yourself to put some of your innermost thoughts on paper.

[GunMetal]

I can tell this came from a sincere place. I would say it reminds me of the verses in Behind Blue Eyes by The Who.

[Coyote Poetry]

Easy to be sad. Hard to come back alive. I like the story in the poem. I like the flow of thoughts and the very good ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Harley (arbiter)]

Nice write. Really gets how others judge without knowing the reason. I love it and can relate a little. Reminds me of song "what its like" by house of pain & everlast. Great job keep it up